Hey guys, I made a new CO character, and adapted a story I had been writing forever to fit into something new.
I know its lame attaching links, but I worked REALLY hard on the formatting.
PRELUDE:
MAIN STORY!!!
(will not open properly on mobile)
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Also, we’re even now… only took me 12 months
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Amazing story and even more-so amazing formatting.
I’ve always been in awe of people who can change Google Docs like an artist can change a canvas - if you’d ask me, I’d call this art without hesitation. Good stuff:)
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The best formatting I have ever seen in a google doc, hands down. Feels like I’m reading a lore document produced by the Aliens team.
If only Bob Cross was there to see Katya commit those crimes against humanity, he would’ve shed a single tear and smile in approval.
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Great story, another W for the Company
Reminds me of Bulgakov’s “Master and Margarita”, which had a similar plot point of:
- “There will be a huge scandal if this guy gets murdered. We must prevent his death”
- “Understood. When and where are we preventing it?”
It will be torn apart amidst the Union and Empire’s endless battle for control
I couldn’t tell if Hayes’ own world got decimated by Soviet Signature Strategy (heavy bombardment) or she’s just a genocidal maniac. Both, perhaps
Nice try, I’m still reading it on my phone 
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Im going to find you
I havent committed any of this to story yet, but to explain some
In the vague lore I set out for the new character a few months ago, I’d decided on a few plot points
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She is 41 years old
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Unrecorded daughter of two members of the failed Kolybel-29 (колыбель-29) colonisation mission to MV-909, one of the many planets selected by the Union of Progressive Peoples in 2119 to harbour the future children of the motherlands amongst the final frontier.
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Born 22 years after the conception of the Kolybel mission series, and 7 years after the establishment of the UPP colony on MV-909, Katya opens her eyes for the first time at some point in the mid-2141s
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However, like many failed colonies born of the Kolybel program, MV-909 was not self-sufficient, relying heavily on the financial life-support of the Union going into the Sol Campaign
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Due to the severely limited resources of the Union during and beyond the Mars proxy war in 2159, the decision was made to abandon the Kolybel program entirely, and cut support for all its previously established colonies, including MV-909
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However, due to the secretive nature of the UPPs involvement in the Sol wars, neither Katya, nor her home colony knows the true reason being the Unions abandonment, leading to growing desperation and resentment in the newly independent colonies
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MV-909 falls to starvation, and the colony completely collapses over the course of 5 years
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Due to the un-documented nature of her birth, Hayes is able escape her dying planet through enlistment in the USCM, feigning TWE citizenship, and slipping into its ranks without detection
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The fates of both her parents remain unknown, presumed lost on MV-909
Hayes blames the fractured state of the galaxy on the death of her family and home, and seeks to do everything in her power to get revenge on the Union, and unify the galaxy to achieve true peace under a single flag, sparing humanity the cruel fate that befell her so many years ago.
So uhm, TLDR, yeah it’s both
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-1 on this CO app
Story was not written as a long as a job application
Council nuke this guy
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GET LOST CHEN!!!
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IIRC, Proggies call their “life viable” planets MV, not LV
Could be wrong, though, I’m not a loremaster of the Aliens
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yeah I do remember seeing a bad CO with that name, it’s all revealed now
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Story’s a bit short, the effort’s not here. You should take to heart the advice given to you by Chen. I heavily suggest withdrawing this… Try again next month
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well, clearance is 0-9 i can’t read this… what was even the point…?
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How hard do the frag and how fast do you ditch your XO to frag out?
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-1 Clearly confused MARSOC and ospreys for FORECON and UD-4s
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If only you spent that much time on your PR
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Wow, I am speechless everyone, thank you all for such an outpouring of kindness and support.
This community never ceases to amaze me!!
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Never seen this guy
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Uhh the formating is pretty nice I guess
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Would recommend you play when every CO whitelistee is online
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i can’t believe you’d do this…
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+1 it’s cool, amazingly written, and the art is done (I’ve been waiting for half a year for this to be done btw), I am NOT BIASED for being a character in this…
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